script 5th draft

Script 5th draft

             FADE IN

Scene 1 –

INT. COLLEGE COMMON ROOM - DAY

Lauren:

Has anyone noticed Em has been acting a bit…

Ben:

 Weird?

Lauren:

 Er yeah I suppose I dunno she’s definitely not been acting herself recently

Luke:

Yeah I've noticed that. I was saying the same thing to Chloe the other

Day wasn't I?

Girl looks up from her phone

Chloe:

what did you say something?

Luke:

 (sighs) yeah we were talking about em? Hasn't been acting herself recently?

Chloe:

Oh... yeah definitely something up with her

(Looks back down to her phone once she’s finished talking)

Lauren:

Maybe we should talk to her about it?

Ben:

What if it’s something really serious though?

Luke:

yeah I can’t cope with your girl problems. Nope, no way let’s just leave it and see if she comes to us.

Lauren:

Okay I’m worried about her though

Chloe:
 yeah to be fair i'm quite worried too

Luke:
Chloe when do you ever worry about anything?

Chloe:
when it comes to my friends i do

Ben:

Shh she’s coming talk about something else

TALL dark haired girl enters the room walks over to the group and sits down next to Chloe

Emily:

 Hi

Chloe:
hi how are you?

Emily:
er not bad

Chloe:
oh okay good

Awkward silenced in the group , all sat looking round at each other while Emily just looks at the floor

Lauren:
are you  sure you're alright em you've been... well it's like...erm...Chloe?

Chloe:
you've been acting really weird recently we're all worried about you, come on you can talk to us

Everyone sits in silence while Emily looks up at each one of them

Emily:
what?

Luke:
I knew we shouldn't of asked her I told you didn't I? Ben what did I say?

Ben
shut-up Luke

Luke:
no seriously we should of just left it

Emily: nice to see you've all been discussing me then

Ben: 
no you've got it wrong its not like that you can't blame us for being worried

Lauren gets up and walks over to sit next to Emily

Lauren:
 look you really haven't been yourself recently are you sure you don't want to talk or something?

Emily:
i dunno what you're talking about I'm fine I’ve just been busy with like coursework and stuff I’ve been tired

Ben:
are you sure? You can tell us you know we are you're friends we've been here for you before remember

Chloe:
yeah come on Em its okay

Emily:
you wouldn't understand okay I said I’m fine can you not just leave it?

others look round at each other in shock, other people in the room start looking over at them

Chloe:
calm down em we were only asking we're your friends we're allowed to be worried about you

Emily:
look I’ve gotta go I’ll see you all later

Luke:
Emily wait

Ben:
just let her go she's obviously not going to talk to us you're all just going to cause an argument

Emily:
 yeah talk to you later okay bye

walks quickly away from the others and bumps into a boy in the corridor 

INT. COLLEGE CORRIDOR - DAY

Adam:
whoa be careful em! Where you running off to anyway?

Emily:
ask them they seem to have a lot to say about me

Emily turns and walks away without saying anything else

Adam:

  did I miss something? What’s up with her?

Ben:
wish we knew man just tried to find out and she went mad at us 

Luke:
what happened to waiting till she came to us anyway?

Ben:

Luke i told you to shut-up about that

Lauren:
i had to know i hate seeing her sad I’m going to try and talk to her again later

Adam:
don't really think that's the best idea ever. She obviously doesn't want us to know

Chloe:

But we’re her friends? We have a right to know if something is upsetting her we could help her if she told us?

Adam:

Whatever do what you want but you’re going to make things worse. Is anyone coming outside I need a fag

Luke:

Yeah I will

Ben:

Yeah me too

Lauren:

Nah I'm going to stay here I’ve got loads of work I need to do. Are you staying clo?

Chloe:

Er no I'm going to go with these, text me or something later let us know how you get on with Emily yeah?

Lauren:

Yeah I will do see you later

All get up and gather their stuff, wave to Lauren as they leave the room

EXT. OUTSIDE COLLEGE BUILDING - DAY

Chloe:

Has anyone else been invited to jack’s party on Friday?

Ben:

Yeah all of us have I think, he usually invites like half the college

Adam:

Last time about five hundred people showed up, his house was trashed

Chloe:

Why does he keep on doing it then? This he’d learn from his mistakes and all that wouldn’t you

Luke:

He just doesn’t really care though does he like as long as he has an excuse to get drunk.

Adam:

Do you reckon Emily will be there? She hasn’t come out with us for ages

Chloe:

Lauren will hopefully sort out whatever her problem is coming out with us might even cheer her up a bit  

Silence for a few seconds as Luke lights another cigarette, see older woman approaching the group without them noticing

Luke:

I think I'm supposed to be in English now you know; Mrs Smith has already gone mad at me for not going all last week

Mrs Smith:

Yes and I'm about to ‘go mad’ again if you don’t get to that lesson NOW!

Rest of the group start to laugh at him

Mrs Smith:

And I don’t know what you’re all finding so funny? Chloe I know Mr Clough has been looking for you and he doesn’t seem too happy, and you two

Turns to look at Adam and Ben

 Mrs Smith:

If you’ve no lesson to be in now get to the common room and do some revision, not long till exams now you know?

Luke:

See you guys at dinner yeah

Chloe:

Yeah see you

All go off in different directions to each other, except Adam and Ben who go in the same direction

                                           FADE OUT

script acted out

Things that need to be changed -

 'Sorry did you say something?' - sorry at the start sounds too posh, could be taken out or changed to 'What'

'you've been acting really weird recently we're all worried about you come on you can talk to us' - add pause doesn't sound right said all in one

'no seriously though we should of just left it'  - sounds better with the though taken out

'i don't know what you're talking about I'm fine I’ve just been busy with like coursework and stuff I’ve been tired' - sounds better shortened to 'dunno' 

'wish we knew man just tried to find out and she flipped' - sounds better when changed to 'went mad' 

script 4th draft

Script 4th draft

             FADE IN

Scene 1 –

INT. COLLEGE COMMON ROOM - DAY

Lauren:

Has anyone noticed Em has been acting a bit…

Ben:

 Weird?

Lauren:

 Er yeah I suppose I dunno she’s definitely not been acting herself recently

Luke:

Yeah I've noticed that. I was saying the same thing to Chloe the other

Day wasn't I?

Girl looks up from her phone

Chloe:

Sorry did you say something?

Luke:

 (sighs) yeah we were talking about em? Hasn't been acting herself recently?

Chloe:

Oh... yeah definitely something up with her

(Looks back down to her phone once she’s finished talking)

Lauren:

Maybe we should talk to her about it?

Ben:

What if it’s something really serious though?

Luke:

yeah I can’t cope with your girl problems. Nope, no way let’s just leave it and see if she comes to us.

Lauren:

Okay I’m worried about her though

Chloe:
 yeah to be fair i'm quite worried too

Luke:
Chloe when do you ever worry about anything?

Chloe:
when it comes to my friends i do

Ben:

Shh she’s coming talk about something else

TALL dark haired girl enters the room walks over to the group and sits down next to Chloe

Emily:

 Hi

Chloe:
hi how are you?

Emily:
er not bad

Chloe:
oh okay good

Awkward silenced in the group , all sat looking round at each other while Emily just looks at the floor

Lauren:
are you  sure you're alright em you've been... well it's like...erm...Chloe?

Chloe:
you've been acting really weird recently we're all worried about you come on you can talk to us

Everyone sits in silence while Emily looks up at each one of them

Emily:
what?

Luke:
I knew we shouldn't of asked her I told you didn't I? Ben what did I say?

Ben
shut-up Luke

Luke:
no seriously though we should of just left it

Emily: nice to see you've all been discussing me then

Ben: 
no you've got it wrong its not like that you can't blame us for being worried

Lauren gets up and walks over to sit next to Emily

Lauren:
 look you really haven't been yourself recently are you sure you don't want to talk or something?

Emily:
i don't know what you're talking about I'm fine I’ve just been busy with like coursework and stuff I’ve been tired

Ben:
are you sure? You can tell us you know we are you're friends we've been here for you before remember

Chloe:
yeah come on Em its okay

Emily:
you wouldn't understand okay I said I’m fine can you not just leave it?

others look round at each other in shock, other people in the room start looking over at them

Chloe:
calm down em we were only asking we're your friends we're allowed to be worried about you

Emily:
look I’ve gotta go I’ll see you all later

Luke:
Emily wait

Ben:
just let her go she's obviously not going to talk to us you're all just going to cause an argument

Emily:
 yeah talk to you later okay bye

walks quickly away from the others and bumps into a boy in the corridor 

INT. COLLEGE CORRIDOR - DAY

Adam:
whoa be careful em! Where you running off to anyway?

Emily:
ask them they seem to have a lot to say about me

Emily turns and walks away without saying anything else

Adam:

  did I miss something? What’s up with her?

Ben:
wish we knew man just tried to find out and she flipped

Luke:
what happened to waiting till she came to us anyway?

Ben:

Luke i told you to shut-up about that

Lauren:
i had to know i hate seeing her sad I’m going to try and talk to her again later

Adam:
don't really think that's the best idea ever. She obviously doesn't want us to know

Chloe:

But we’re her friends? We have a right to know if something is upsetting her we could help her if she told us?

Adam:

Whatever do what you want but you’re going to make things worse. Is anyone coming outside I need a fag

Luke:

Yeah I will

Ben:

Yeah me too

Lauren:

Nah I'm going to stay here I’ve got loads of work I need to do. Are you staying clo?

Chloe:

Er no I'm going to go with these, text me or something later let us know how you get on with Emily yeah?

Lauren:

Yeah I will do see you later

All get up and gather their stuff, wave to Lauren as they leave the room

EXT. OUTSIDE COLLEGE BUILDING - DAY

Chloe:

Has anyone else been invited to jack’s party on Friday?

Ben:

Yeah all of us have I think, he usually invites like half the college

Adam:

Last time about five hundred people showed up, his house was trashed

Chloe:

Why does he keep on doing it then? This he’d learn from his mistakes and all that wouldn’t you

Luke:

He just doesn’t really care though does he like as long as he has an excuse to get drunk.

Adam:

Do you reckon Emily will be there? She hasn’t come out with us for ages

Chloe:

Lauren will hopefully sort out whatever her problem is coming out with us might even cheer her up a bit  

Silence for a few seconds as Luke lights another cigarette, see older woman approaching the group without them noticing

Luke:

I think I'm supposed to be in English now you know; Mrs Smith has already gone mad at me for not going all last week

Mrs Smith:

Yes and I'm about to ‘go mad’ again if you don’t get to that lesson NOW!

Rest of the group start to laugh at him

Mrs Smith:

And I don’t know what you’re all finding so funny? Chloe I know Mr Clough has been looking for you and he doesn’t seem too happy, and you two

Turns to look at Adam and Ben

 Mrs Smith:

If you’ve no lesson to be in now get to the common room and do some revision, not long till exams now you know?

Luke:

See you guys at dinner yeah

Chloe:

Yeah see you

All go off in different directions to each other, except Adam and Ben who go in the same direction

                                           FADE OUT

internet research

http://www.writersstore.com/how-to-write-a-screenplay-a-guide-to-scriptwriting/  this website provides an example of how a script should look and gives notes on how to write a script that will look like the example it gives. This wil halp me when writing my script as i can check if it is looking how it should as i write it.

Format

Here is a basic list of how your script should be formatted.

• Typeface Always use Courier 12-point font!
• Margins Because of the 3-hole punched paper, the Left margin should be 1.5 inches and the Right is .5 inches.
  Top and Bottom should be 1 inch each.
  Dialogue -2.5 inches from the left- will be about 3 to 3.5 inches wide and shouldn't extend more than 6 inches from the left.
  Character's Name at 3.7 inches and above the dialogue.
• Page Numbers should be located in the upper right hand corner and then double space and continue writing.
• First Page A screenplay begins with FADE IN:
• Last Page At the end of your script you should type The End and center it, or double space, to the far right of the page, and type FADE OUT

http://www.angelfire.com/movies/coolscreenwriter/structure.html

This website provides information on how a script should be structured, including things like whats font should be used and how big the margins should be this will help me with making sure i format my script in the correct way

Scene transitions in a screenplay indicate changes from one setting to a new setting, or from one time frame to a different time frame.

Transitional instructions should always be used to indicate these changes.

"CUT TO:" is the simplest form of transition. The words "CUT TO:" are typed in capital letters at the right of the page. CUT TO: (punctuated with a colon) is inserted after an abrupt change from one setting to another.

Example:

CLOSE ON the framed photograph of Harriet sitting on a sailboat next to a tall, handsome young man who has his arm around her. They are smiling, happy, in love.

CUT TO:

EXT. NEW YORK HARBOR - SAME DAY

We see CHARLES, the handsome young man from the photograph, among a crowd of people boarding a cruise ship docked in New York harbor.

Double spacing is used before and after "CUT TO:" or other transitional instructions.

Several scenes linked together that move from interior to exterior do not require instructions such as "CUT TO" because the changing scene headings explain the scene change.

In a dynamic screenplay, the action moves inside (INT.) and outside (EXT.). If all the action were to take place in one setting, it would be visually dull. That's why a well-structured screenplay moves from place to place. http://www.scriptologist.com/Magazine/Formatting/Scene/scene.html  this website gives notes on how to put scene changes into your script as i have more than one scene change during my script it will help me with making sure i set those out right.