Things that need to be changed -
'Sorry did you say something?' - sorry at the start sounds too posh, could be taken out or changed to 'What'
'you've been acting really weird recently we're all worried about you come on you can talk to us' - add pause doesn't sound right said all in one
'no seriously though we should of just left it' - sounds better with the though taken out
'i don't know what you're talking about I'm fine I’ve just been busy with like coursework and stuff I’ve been tired' - sounds better shortened to 'dunno'
'wish we knew man just tried to find out and she flipped' - sounds better when changed to 'went mad'
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